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[latest poems added April 06, 2003]

Combine Your Grammar and Poetry Skills

Hundreds of poems:
Poems received in 2002
Poems received in 2001
Poems received in 2000
Poems received in 1999.
Poems received in 1998 and earlier.


Note: Only poems observing the grammatical categories will be published.


poet

Write a 5-line poem in the following constructivist manner:


  1. On the first line write a noun of your choice
  2. On the second line write two adjectives joined by and to describe this noun
  3. On the third line write a verb and an adverb to describe this noun in action
  4. Start the fourth line with like or as followed by a comparison
  5. Start the final line with if only followed by a wish

Below is an example of such a poem (written by the Norwegian pupil Sven Grüner):

Politician
phoney and false
lying desperately
like a mocking bird
if only I had the key to the bird cage

Now it's your turn. Use the white space below to write a 5-line poem of your choice. Whenever you need to, you can call up a search form for Merriam-Webster OnLine (with sound!) to help you look into and/or experiment with synonyms to the words you first chose (opens in separate window). Make changes and decide which version works best. This is great to discuss and actually sculpt your language. Note that you can also copy (parts of) the text you find in the Theasaurus.

The finished poem can be passed on or published in many ways:

  1. mark the poem (use left mouse key, press down and drag your pointer across the text)
  2. use the edit option or Ctrl-C to copy your poem to the clipboard
  3. start a word processor or Notepad and paste your poem into it (Ctrl-V)
  4. or open your browser's mail option (if present), copy the poem and mail it to someone
  5. why not mail the poem to me anlun@online.no

Good poems will be published on this website for all the visitors to read!

It is also possible (and fun) to do this exercise in a very low-tech way: Decide on a theme for the noun in the first line. Then let the pupils suggest the subsequent lines, write everything on the blackboard. Make sure you go over the lines again to open up for synonyms, creative imagery and unexpected twists. The next versions will be so much better than first one.

Poems received:

The following poems are published chronologically as I receive them.
Class contributions are placed in "boxes" at the bottom of the page.

musician
long and lonely
walking desperately
like an singing bird
if only I had the key to his heart

By "Baltic Viking" (balticviking@balticviking.lv)

Death
Warm and Wonderful
Expecting Impatiently
As A Puppy Waits Its Owner
If Only The Road Wouldn't Be So Long


By Juan Domingo Peron (buenosurreal@yahoo.com)

 

Life

confusing but interesting
going gradually
like walking along the road
can be happy if only one had not walk too fast.

By Sujira Kasamsuk" (skasamsuk@hotmail.com)

 
Paradox
Anxious and confusing
Daydreaming foolishly
Like an explosion of my memory
If only roads traveled one way

By Jay Black (jinko_fukuro@yahoo.com.au)

Rose

Beautiful and pure

Growing fast

Like a soldier fighting to survive against shots and storms.

 If only I can give one to you, I wish to receive your heart in change.

 

Heart

Strong and persistent

Never surrender

Like a hundred of stars dancing on a cold night.

Of only I give you my heart, I wish you to find a place for it inside of yours.

 

By Jose Eduardo (eduardo__007@hotmail.com)

 

Pain

Scary and horrible

Hurting quickly your hearth

Like claws in your arms

If only pain doesn't exist

 

Darkness

Black and silent

Breathing behind you

Like monsters on your back

If only darkness could be brighter

 

By Priscilla Ruiz Palomino Haro (mexprph@hotmail.com)

Hurt
miserable and painful
marked wounds
like a scar
if only I could make it disappear

Love
Joy and pain
aching heart
like a firecraker wanting to explode
if only I could have you here with me

By Ingrid Padilla (ingridpadilla@hotmail.com)

Death

Deeply Cold and Embracing

Morbidly calling our names

Like a corpse in the middle of the slaughter

leaving us to wish only mercy... If only humans could disappear...

 

Life

Blinding and Weak

Walking among worthless creatures

Like a cursed fairy inside its blood shell

If only life could be taken away from our beloved spirit...

 

By Odin Lord of the vikings (wouthan24@hotmail.com)

 

Eyes
Fragile and black
Seeing sweetly
Like a flower spilling honey
If only these eyes are windows of her soul

Eyes
Fragile and black
Seeing sweetly
Like a flower spilling honey
If only these eyes are windows of her soul.

 
She
Beautiful and sweetly
Inspiring tenderly
Like moon to the night
If only I could have her here beside me, for a while.

 

By Jorge Arturo Moto (mknostrajamus@hotmail.com)

Canada

friendly and far

helping the others to stop crying

like the giant of north America

if only I’d live there I’d die of happiness

 

Hockey

funny and hard

hitting the others having fun

like the rudest game on the earth

if only I can play it again

 

By José ALejandro Lara (alejandro__lara@hotmail.com)

Magdalene 
saved and exorcized
testifies brilliantly
like a rain forest moth turned butterfly
Wow! I wish I had her style!

By Bobbie A. Drake (clavilux@prodigy.net)

lion
terrible and enormous
scratching quickly
like a big machine
if i have the machine
 
By Alvaro Beruben (lostek_lez69@hotmail.com)

 


Narcisist
Self-deluding and repulsive
Bragging constantly
Like a pigeon with too many issues.
If only I had killed him when I had the chance

By "Adams, Sunshine" (Sunshine.Adams@schwab.com)

Peace
beautiful and inspiring
waiting desperately
like a bomb
If only I could blow it away

By Sandra Moraes" (sandramoraes@ig.com.br)

Hero
Brave and Strong
fighting courageously
like there is no tomorrow
if I only had the courage that they have

By Stephanie Drake (trikynikki@cox.net)

Rainbow

colorful and fluffy

shines happily

like a large diamond

if only I could hug it

 

By Denhi Molina" (denhim@hotmail.com)

 

Love
sweet and beautiful
like the the draw toward evening
if only I can feel it for all my eternity.
 
Winter
cold and  snowy
like the end of a story
if only can be sunny again.

By María Fernanda Minakata" <mafer_monster@hotmail.com

 
Men
Intelligent and powerful
Destroying rapidly
like a the fire in the forests
if we were like innocent children
 
Death
mysterious and scaring
taking people unexpectedly
like a luck ruler
If we could know everything about it.

By Jose de Jesus Muñoz Villanueva
(Jose_neo86@hotmail.com)

Dogs
Faithful and funny
Playing happily
Like a boy and his new toy
If only they could speak so we can be friends

 

Home
Warm and Sweet
Keeping me safe
Like fire in a cold snowed day
If only I could be there forever

 
By Mauricio Fernandez (pvd_90@hotmail.com)

 

man
ingenious and combative
creating destructively
like an hungry best
if only I can be reasonable 

Horoscope
Illusionists and false
dreaming happily
like a perfect life
if only they were true
By erick gallegos espinosa (egegall@hotmail.com)

Sky

Blue and clear

Relaxing calm

Like going up to heaven

If only I could be there

 

Death

Black and scary

Sad and creepy

Like one big red apple that is rotten

If only I could stop it

 

By Juan Octavio Palazuelos (dr_t0mbie@hotmail.com)

War

bloody and destructive

killing noisely

like a living nightmare

if only this could be over

 

Music

soft and smooth

tingling my ears

like bells in christmas

if only songs last for ever.

 

By Diego Cruz (dch20@hotmail.com)

 

reject
painful and sick
sofly destroyer
like a killer gun
if only I won't be in a lovers dream
 

stars
shinny and bightly
shaking slowly in the infinite sky
as a firefly lost in the night
if only I could reach one just for feel it.


By Olivia Sandoval (chamoy80@hotmail.com)

 

war

bad and cold

destroting all in its way

like a giant bulldozer out of control

if only there were no war

basketball

triumphant and glorious

showing off in every way

like an agile bobcat sneaking close to its pray

if only i had a basketball to play 

 

By Oscar Ruiz (bbp4l@hotmail.com)

 


Received Dec 29, 2002:

 

Hello,

 

My name is Sílvia and I'm a young English teacher from Portugal. I've recently come across your site, and I've found it really interesting. One of the problems I have here is how to motivate students to learn English, so I thought about asking my young students to write something that could be published in your site along with other students work. The theme we've choosen was computers and here are the results.

 

best wishes,

Sílvia

 

Computer

Sensitive and soft

It sounds magically

Like a woman

If only I could understand them…

 

By Ricardo Gil and Bruno Dias

 

 

Computer

Good and bad

It makes everything quietly

Like a ninja

If only it could fight

 

By Daniel and Luís Chaves

 

Computer

Practical and fast

It thinks fast

Like a bullet

If only it could fly…

 

By Mário and Nuno

 

Computer

Good and functional

Speedy and good

Like a woman

If only I could kiss her

 

By Sérgio Miguel and André Dores

 

Computer

Fast and entertaining

It thinks and executes

Like a genius

If only I loved it

 

By Sérgio and João

 

Computer

Intelligent and slow

It helps a lot

Like a book

If only we knew how to work with it

 

By Vanuza Santos and Sandra Dias

 

Computer

Fast and useful

I like to connect to the internet

It has lots of information

I which I could work much better with a computer

 

By Andreia

 

Computer

Intelligent and organized

It speaks

Rapidly

I wish it wouldn’t speak

 

By Célia Sobreira

 

Computer

Good and bad

When studying

It speaks to me

I wish I could turn it off

 

By Filipa Carmo

 

Computer

Good and bad

It studies

Speedily

I wish I could turn it off

 

By Ílidio

 

Computer

Efficient and quick

At date

It plays

I wish I always had access to it

 

By Maria Inês

 

Computer

Good and bad

It writes

And organizes everything

I wish I could turn it off

 

By Carina Carvalho

 

 

Computer

Slow and dumb

It influences with its games

Like a dog

If only I could smoke it

 

By Ricardo Pais and Pedro Pereira

 

Computer

Slow and fast

It plays music

Like a radio

If only I could touch it

 

By Bruno Sampaio and André Ribeiro

 

Computer

Sometimes it is slow but beautiful

It works

Slowly

I wish I had a new computer

 

By Bruno Santos

 

My Computer

Is very big

It works very well

It’s very fast

I wish it spoke

 

By Sílvia Santos

 

Computer

Fast and beautiful

It does everything

Rapidly

I wish I had one

 

By Patrícia Lopes

 

Computer

Fast and practical

It works

Rapidly

I wish I had one

 

By Vanessa

 

Computer

Big and small

It writes

Slowly

I wish I could write on it

By Ana Catarina

 

Computer

Slow and beautiful

It starts slowly

I wish I would work with a computer

 

By Cristiana Gomes

 

Computer

Big and dumb

I like it

A lot

I wish it could speak

 

By Hermingarda

 

Computer

Quick and efficient

It has

Complications

I wish I had one

 

By Suzi Gomes

 

Computer

Practical and intelligent

It works well

Sometimes it works very slowly

I wish I could turn it on faster

 

By Vânia Guiomar

 

Computer

Small and slow

It works

Rapidly

I wish I had a fast computer

 

By Ana Filipa

 

 


 
 




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